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Sharlene Neuenfeldt –
The very heart of your writing while appearing reasonable at first, did not really sit well with me after some time. Somewhere within the paragraphs you actually managed to make me a believer but just for a short while. I nevertheless have a problem with your jumps in logic and you would do nicely to help fill in all those gaps. When you actually can accomplish that, I could certainly be impressed.
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